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Hush your voice before
   It carries mine away
Unlock your worn door
   If I could enter I may
And we should dance and I'd stay
(We need not talk per say)
(I'd swallow my bitterness if asked once more)
And to us the world would be a bore

In the golden delicacy of this state
   Now we wouldn't rest
Accept our faded intertwined fate
   then together we'll reach our crest
Here our love will be expressed
(It need not be professed)
(I'd listen, wherever to your stories may relate)
And you could pick us a final date

For whomever I may have been or will be,
And I know it was hard, but plain to see
That I will do my utmost best, to your heart's content
To you my heart and soul I've forever lent
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Now this is sweet, and also surprisingly quite retro. When I read this piece it felt almost as if I was hearing a ballad, like whoever made this was singing to their significant other. I find that forgotten and ancient sentiment to be incredibly touching, true I am personally quite partial to the sentimental tones of such sweet words, but it's the manner of which it's presented that really gets me. Sometimes we tend to forget that sometimes the most simplest ways of telling someone we love them is in fact the best way to do so. We don't need fancy words, poetry or jargon of romantic speech. Don't get me wrong it's nice, but it's the heart that counts and that's why I like this piece.
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Gary-thedreamingpoet Dec 5, 2012  Professional Writer
Nice work my friend, I thoroughly enjoyed this :)
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NiallCloud Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks Gary :D
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Gary-thedreamingpoet Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
:)
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Firey-Fox Nov 29, 2012  Student Writer
This is awsome! I like this piece ^_^
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NiallCloud Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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Firey-Fox Nov 29, 2012  Student Writer
anytime ^_^
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